Sunday, 21 February 2016

Popcorn writing

Popcorn writing 
We put the popcorns corn in the popcorn machine. It started popping loudly and noisily until it sounded like a airplane landing. The smell smelt like melted butter in a frying pan. It looked like yellow sheep trying to get out ,out like rocket bouncing of a force field. The popcorn machine was like a monster spitting out popcorn like a popcorn volcano. When I tasted the popcorn it tasted like some kind of popcorn gum sticking on my teeth. It felt a little bit soft but the inside of the popcorn was a little bit hard. 







2 comments:

  1. Lots of descriptions in here Jack.. I like how you said the monster was spitting out popcorn like a popcorn volcano. Miss D :)

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  2. Jack - you have done a great job of using the senses to help your readers connect with your experience of making popcorn. You have also carefully chosen words to help write your description. Well Done. Kiri

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